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38240
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post #38240 :: 2014.02.24 8:45pm
Your composing is pretty good! I think the ideas could use some better transition, instead of sounding like many ideas plugged together, for more coherence, and I think that will come as you write more. Good job!
 
 
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post #38426 :: 2014.02.26 11:08am
  
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are you the founder of NINTENDO? nicely done
 
 
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post #38557 :: 2014.02.27 6:59am
A lot of great ideas in this piece, I think I will side against chunter and say that this is actually flowing pretty well. Nice work
 
 

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