I really like the idea, maybe aside af that glitching, which doesn't really convince me (maybe try to corrupt it a bit differently). And i have to agree with sleeparrow about the font. Try changing it to something better fitting tbh.
Ugh, i dunno. The original-original photo that I took from the scene that i created is this : http://i.imgur.com/6KVw2hn.png. I may try to corrupt it again and try to reupload for another time but I am running low on time, inspiration and motivation. Peace out.